starlight-x-A-x 2010-07-08 id # 3001335436
i really cant tell whats going on!!
soemtimes i wonder what hermiones true allegiances are, if killing harry is really what she wants to do? I really cant tell.
but i can tell you that as previously she really winds me up!! seriously could she be anymore frustrating, and if the order do win, shes not guna just get away with all this if she truly was on the dark side, unless of course she dies, which would solve that problem, and im not sure if your fic will have a 'happy' ending.
i hope draco manages to save ginny and harry, after all, what harry said still stands, he cant be killed to save the life of one when the whole world restS on his shoulders, (except of course if that one person is your wife).
but all my doubts and frustrations of the character should be a credit to your writing for making me feel that way. But by frigging jesus on a bicycle her vendetta and hatred and resolute belief that harry /should die/ extremely gets on my wick!
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Starlight-x-A-x - HAHA! This is my cruel side coming out. I want to keep you all guessing for as long as possible. As much as I'm sure you can picture me here with a fag protruding from my mouth and a derisive mouth slipping from my lips everytime I exhale I assure you I am not. The image here is more one of avid stress! lol. My keyboard is smoking, not me. I have been typing, checking, rechecking and really putting my all into these chapters so that when all is revealed it all makes sense.
A question for you. Why wouldn't she want to kill Harry?
He abandoned her after being her best friend for years. When he left she was tortured both mentally and physically- because apparently I didn't realise I was such a sadist until I wrote this. Because of him the pathway to Malfoy was left clearer. Ok not completely, she still had Ginny and Neville, but Hermione is a proud lady. Not only did she not want to endanger them, and to prove to them that she could be as strong as Harry and protect them. She also couldn't bare the shame of admitting what she'd done.
I am hoping that the frustration you feel is only that which I intended through the character and that it's not severe enough to put you off reading. :S I 'want' you to be annoyed at Hermione, like Draco is. Everyone should be. BUT I don't want it to be to the point that everyone is put off reading the fic.
I will reply to your later review in another post but for now I must get back to typing chapter 50. Chapter 49 will probably be up by friday night ready for people to read at the weekend. Unless you would like me to wait and only post it when chapter 50 is up? Either way I don't see there being a long wait between posts. Thanks so much for the wonderful reviews.
B xxx
oohhh thanks for replying directly! :) I love conferring with authors or other readers! :D
ReplyDeleteive not reviewed much really i dont think lately. (Or well much in comparison to some of my other looooongg ones) But ive been abit busy or youve posted realllyy late at night ;) and then ive refreshed the page and proceeded to read the chappy really late at night :)
Ohhh and i mentioned last friday night/saturday moring, that i had my theory driving later that day. I failed it. Only by a few marks mind you, so not totally abismally. If you're interested in knowing, lol. Stupid bloody test.
But great writing these last chapters - i still cant quite figure out whats really going on. Like ive said before i start to think it might be going in one direction but then a few paragraphs later i'm backtracking completely and hovering over a different one. And its great that you intended to write hermione so that she frustrated people. If that was the aim, than thats fantastic characterisation and writing skills to achieve it. And no it didnt put me off reading, it just annoyed me.
And i really liked the scene in the dungeon with draco and harry. I love that harry believes that draco could lead the order and that he really trusts and believes in him. Completely heartbreaking too mind you, lol :P.
cheers!
star xx
:D Thanks again. I really wanted a strong, contrasting scene with Harry and Draco before the end-other than the one in the study at headquarters. I felt the need to have a bit more between them other than that decision Harry made in which, when Draco left, Harry was crying. I wanted to really show how selfless Harry was being in dying so that Draco could remain in place and ultimately remove Voldy from power. It also gave me the opportunity to show Draco in a bit of a different light. I made sure to put in a line (not sure off the top of my head) about how Draco was like:
ReplyDeleteWhy couldn't Potter stop being so selfless.
And there was another line where Draco said he could never be a hero like Potter.
it was just a bit to show everyone how much Draco has grown and learnt and what not. He doesn't necessarily 'like' harry but he understands the guys importance.
I'm sorry to hear about your theory test and I hope I'm not the reason :( I tend to write at night when i can't sleep. I get too distracted in the daytime. So sorry about that. I've updated today tho and it's daytime! lol. But I'd already finished writing that chapter :S
Hmm, I'm still concerned about the annoying Hermione thing. I hope its not too off putting. I do realise the whole thing has dragged over 50 chapters so I hope it's not too much now. Especially if someone was to read it all in one go. I think I just REALLY wanted to show how very very betrayed she was, and understandably by his actions in school. (Stab-OW!!!) And also her reluctance to be involved with him for oh so many reasons. But I guess to a reader who does not know them it might be annoying. So sorry about that :S
B xxxx
omg lol at brackets*stab-ow*brackets
ReplyDeletefunny :P
I think that maybe im abit too frivolous with my feelings about some of the events that have hapened. Cos if i was stabbed by the man i love im pretty sure id feel quite betrayed too. But because im liking draco so much and know that he truly regrets it, im kinda overlooking some of the bad things he's done and im not trying to really understand hermiones pov more.
And i also think that some of the extent of my frustration with her in the 2nd part lies with the fact, and i think youve wrote about it recently but the opposite of what im about say, that i dont think what harry and the others did at the end of the battle of hogwarts warrants all of her hatred, revenge and actions there after. I think youve explained recently as has draco to harry that it was like a major betrayal and such to her but because i dont really think its enough to make her into the person shes become i therefore dont think its right for her to be all revenge hunting. its not as if they truly hung her out to dry, i mean they had the incident at the end of that battle but then they didnt see hide nor hair of her until 6 years later, so its not like they even had a chance to reconcile. And the incident at the battle was more like a snub or a brief turning of their backs agaisnt her and all went down in the space of like 10 minuites. Again, there wasnt enough time for them to try and reconcile. Who knows what could have happened had she not disappeared?
So yeah, the hermione thing. 1) you intended to write her to kinda frustrate ppl anyway. and 2)the reason she might frustrate me more than most readers is probably because i dont agree with her reasons. I might be being abit unreasonable towards her but thats just my opinion.
(ps dont you think its weird how when reading and reviwing you talk about the charcacters as if they're real people when in fact its the author who has made them who they are and what theyve done. When i critisize hermione, i want to critique her (Even if she is fictional) and not actually your writing or portrayal of her. i hope it doesnt come across as being negative about you. Its about /her/. Does that make any sense??lol :P)
and no my failure at driving isnt your fault, i now feel the need to reassure you lol, i hope in my previous comment it didnt sound like i was blaming you.
No Im just completely useless at stuff like that and hate revising for it. Plus i go to bed really late every night. Have done for like the last 2 years. I always tell myself that tonight i'll go to bed early (meaning 10 or 11) but i always find someting to do and go between 12 and 4. Even if its a weekday and i have to be up between 6 and 8.
In fact a few months ago i went to bed at 5am, and got up at 6.30am. When i got home at night, i fell asleep at like 4.30pm and didnt wake up until 6:30am the next morning and only because my mum came in to wake me up. I was still fully dressed, my laptop and tv were on and my light. And i was totally confused about the time lol.
now that was entirely too long, im off! :)
xx
Not too long at all and thank you so much for another long review on the fic. - To which I will respond to in a new post.
ReplyDeleteI get what you mean about characters becoming real but I'm really glad you explained that as I was beginning to worry a lil about the whole Hermione thing because I have focused sooo much on Draco's POV in this part. I had to. because if I put in too much from Hermione's POV people could read what she's thinking and there would be no speculation. My only concern now is about everything living up to expectation. I have had the plot for this fic written for soooo long and added lil bits as I went along, but i'm worried that when all is reveal people will go, oh. right. Because the problem is that everyone has their own ideas and no matter what I can't please everyone. Some want a Dark Hermione to stay. Some want her to go back to the Order. Some want to see Hermione and Draco become heir and heiress and then take V down. Its all a bit nerve-wracking for me tbh.
I know how you feel about the sleep but I am relieved that it wasn't my fault. I don't sleep well. i suffered from insomnia from 14 and was diagnosed with it for definite at 16. and now because of my medical issues and the chronic pain problems it only makes me worse. My huge problem is the morphine which is why there are so many mistakes in the fic and why I'm always checking for plot holes. When I DO sleep, I sleep for HOURS! It's crazy.
As for your thoughts and theories on Hermione. Although it is tempting for me to want to reveal to someone what will happen I most definitely wont lol. Even if you asked me. :P ONLY because I think it will spoil it. I am so honoured- and I know that's a dramatic word, but I am!- that you have become so involved in this fic. I think it would be a shame for both me as a writer and for you as a reader to loose the mystery. Is that ok?
Anyways I must be off. I need to write this very troublesome chapter.. it's giving me a headache :(
Thanks as always! ^_^ B xxx
ohh yeahh, totally agree with you about not giving away the plot.
ReplyDeleteIm just impatient like that, once i get into something, i get really involved with it, as you can probably tell lol ;)
So when i get into something i like to know the ins and outs of everything. Plus i loved English at school and i love reading so i actually really enjoy analysing stories and characters and grappling with their aims and motivations. I guess thats the reason why as i said in my review, i always give a point and then counter it immediately
i think it will live up to expectation. yess we're all on edge for the outcome and you keep us guessing so even if the reaction was oh right. Its been one hell of a journey to get there. Stick to your guns and just do whatever plot ending you had oriignally planned.
i dont know where i want the fic to go. When i think about it, i think of all the events that could happen - like some of the ones you listed, and then i think of the consequences of those events. My mind just sprouts off in all directions. Trying to decide which one id like more is difficult. And if i dont like how you end it, i will just mentally fanfic the fanfic and imagine my own ending! lol :P
happy writing! and good luck of course :D xx
lol! Oh dear. Well don't look into it too much. Although I'm being as scrupulous as I can be I have no doubt plot holes may appear :S 'I' like what I've got planned but I worry that people won't and I can't really talk about it without giving more away so I'm gona stop :P
ReplyDeleteIn fact I am off to write more and make sure it lives up to expectations. Or at least I HOPE it does. :) Thank you as always for reviewing I find it so exciting to have someone to talk to about it ^_^ Thank you Tank you Thank you!
I will reply again in a bit more depth but for now I need to go and agonise over this chapter ;P
B xxxx